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Please, please update quickly! I need to know what happens...pretty please with three cheeries on top!!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapter?

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

hmm... this is a weird but kinda cool story! hope snape will fuck her soon! i wanna know actually, u know it was written that when the guard put him inside hermione, she screamed. it's because she's a virgin and it hurt right? anyway, i wana know, does it really hurt? cos i'm a virgin (20 yrs old already!) and i need to know!!

This could be an excellent story. You have my attention.
You do need longer chapters, spaces between paragraphs, and better punctuation. It wouldn\'t hurt to include more information about the scene or her feelings.
Try to improve. :-)

I know you say you haven\'t read the books, but even from watching the movies, you should be able to get a feel of their characters... I just don\'t see Hermione hungering for sex and willingly becoming a prostitute after being abused by the guards for two years... your story just doesn\'t seem believable.

If Hermione was forced by circumstances to become a prostitute, it would make your story a lot more believable... she could be reluctantly intrigued by the thought of serving Snape, but she would definitely have a hard time admitting it to herself.

Also, it would be nice if you put some more details into your story.

Good luck with it.

Please learn the art of proper punctuation, and the use of paragraphs.

Evil cliffee! Please Update Soon!

okay this has potential but you need a few things
longer chapter... definately
and divide up your paragraphs with a blank line it will make it easier to read..

hope you take my advice to heart cause i think this could be great

Granger, Mudblood.
story seems interesting although I think you can expand on how she got into prison and what it was like there.