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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it a lot! one thing though:just a little ( a little) raunchy in the last chapter, but keep up the good work!
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was really good. Hmm, I wonder what Cassy is gonna do to Sev...Continue writing!
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August 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Definitely one of the better HP stories I have read so far
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July 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey Trickie Woo, thank you for that review. It's incredible to me that you should mention Mark & Bridget. Please drop me a line and i'll tell you why. Look forward to hearing from you. Cassidy Rain.
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July 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
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July 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
At last she showed some common sense and gave in to what her heart and her body kept trying to tell her and her mind refused to see.
I stand by what I said in my last review, he does care for her, more than he knows or would ever admit to himself or anyone else. He proved that when he knocked on her door and left himself open to give her comfort or whatever else she wanted that he could provide for her. That was remeniscent to me of Bridget Jones going to the New Years Day party at the Darcy's and holding herself wide open to rejection when she spoke privately to Mark. Fortunately Mark took care of all his loose ends and went back to make good on her offer. I'm a hopeless romantic when it come to literary characters I care about so I'm hoping your hints about the next chapter mean that it's just as romantic as it was with Bridget & Mark.
I've had people tell me that I have psychic abilities, but I think it's more that I have strong intuition. The closest I've come to being psychic is sensing people from the past were there in some ancient churches I visited in England, and in some church yards in Virginia. On a bus tour to Normandy years ago there was a feeling of being pulled, that I was being drawn irrisistably home that got stronger and stonger as the bus got closer to Normandy. When we got there I did feel like I had come home. But that is very different from her psychic ability.
I like your way of giving both viewpoints, rather than confusing I find it gives me insight to the characters.
I stand by what I said in my last review, he does care for her, more than he knows or would ever admit to himself or anyone else. He proved that when he knocked on her door and left himself open to give her comfort or whatever else she wanted that he could provide for her. That was remeniscent to me of Bridget Jones going to the New Years Day party at the Darcy's and holding herself wide open to rejection when she spoke privately to Mark. Fortunately Mark took care of all his loose ends and went back to make good on her offer. I'm a hopeless romantic when it come to literary characters I care about so I'm hoping your hints about the next chapter mean that it's just as romantic as it was with Bridget & Mark.
I've had people tell me that I have psychic abilities, but I think it's more that I have strong intuition. The closest I've come to being psychic is sensing people from the past were there in some ancient churches I visited in England, and in some church yards in Virginia. On a bus tour to Normandy years ago there was a feeling of being pulled, that I was being drawn irrisistably home that got stronger and stonger as the bus got closer to Normandy. When we got there I did feel like I had come home. But that is very different from her psychic ability.
I like your way of giving both viewpoints, rather than confusing I find it gives me insight to the characters.
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July 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I read all 8 chapters tonight and I really like this story. The lemon was exquisite, but why didn't she do a full reading of him? She claims there was no trace of any feelings for her in his mind. She stopped her reading far too soon, she stopped with Lily's death. That was more than 11 years ago. Why didn't she search through the years afterwards, that's where the information is that Dumbledore wants and that's where she would find his true feelings about her. I'm sure his feelings for her are a lot deeper than just animal lust and had she taken the time to go further I think she would have found that her truly cared for her and is falling in love with her.
Of course these are all rhetorical questions, if she had followed through all his memories to the present day there would probably be very little left of the story to tell. I have gotten hooked on your story, Cassidy, and the chemistry between Cassidy and Severus, so I will wait for your updates, please let me know when you do update.
I do have a suggestion for you. In the sentence where she says to Jessica "I know that he wants normalcy...", I think 'normality' is a better word to convey just what she means. I saw a few minor errors as I read all 8 chapters, most of them were typos and a place where 'loose' is written and it should be 'lose'. You or your beta should go back and fix these. This story is too good to leave careless minor errors in it, they detract from the quality of your story and your writing and both of them are very good.
Of course these are all rhetorical questions, if she had followed through all his memories to the present day there would probably be very little left of the story to tell. I have gotten hooked on your story, Cassidy, and the chemistry between Cassidy and Severus, so I will wait for your updates, please let me know when you do update.
I do have a suggestion for you. In the sentence where she says to Jessica "I know that he wants normalcy...", I think 'normality' is a better word to convey just what she means. I saw a few minor errors as I read all 8 chapters, most of them were typos and a place where 'loose' is written and it should be 'lose'. You or your beta should go back and fix these. This story is too good to leave careless minor errors in it, they detract from the quality of your story and your writing and both of them are very good.
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July 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not the worst SI (self insertion) fic I've read, but it isn't an OFC by definition of such. As it is, this belongs in the "Mary Sues" catagory. Not bad though for a first timer, and I will give that credit where it is due. The hopping around of the first person view between characters does detract from a decent SI fic. Songfic also needs to be added to the rated listings.
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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so much for sending me an email to tell me that you updated!! Squee!! It has indeed been some time since we were able to do something, and I had almost given up hope! But things are back on track, I updated my other Fic The Winter Guest (Celebrity FanFiction dedicated to Alan Rickman) and am currently brewing on a new Ginny/Snape fic perhaps the next chapter in Ginny Works Magic...who know!
And you've updated too! Yes! Tonight I will take the time and completely re-read your story, it's been a while since I read it. Anyway, thanks for letting me know!!!
And you've updated too! Yes! Tonight I will take the time and completely re-read your story, it's been a while since I read it. Anyway, thanks for letting me know!!!
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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
All I can say is: wow...