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January 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your plot is alright, but the story were a lot easier to read if you let it run through a spell checking program. I am not a native speaker myself, so don
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December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i want a nother chapter plz..you left me stuck..
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please don\'t take this as flaming. I really do believe that this story could be good. But there are things amiss:
You took a good idea and ruined it. And I\'m not just talking about spelling, punctuation and basic grammer - I\'m talking about inconsistancy.
1) How does Malfoy go from being disgusted by the thought of touching Ginny, to kissing her. You explained nothing and gave no reasonable reasons.
2) Also, along that line, why the friggin
You took a good idea and ruined it. And I\'m not just talking about spelling, punctuation and basic grammer - I\'m talking about inconsistancy.
1) How does Malfoy go from being disgusted by the thought of touching Ginny, to kissing her. You explained nothing and gave no reasonable reasons.
2) Also, along that line, why the friggin
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this story has potential, but you REALLY need a Beta reader to check it over before posting. The grammar is horrible, and the spelling mistakes distract the reader from the story. When a new person is speaking, you start a new paragraph. And it\'s \'thought\' not \'tought\'.
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Having your story betaed for spelling and grammatical errors would make it more enjoyable to read. Great title for a story! :)
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October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'d like to read more. Will you add chapters?