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October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hay love it please please update asp oh it\'s Snape isn\'t or Darco Oh i don\'t known
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October 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AHHH!!! OMG! YOU HAVE TO UPDATE!! *cuddles Harry* Poor thing. Hes all sad and crying and I JUST WANNA GIVE HIM TEA!!! *sniffles* Update soon, please, please, please *puppy dog eyes*
Osaki
Osaki
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i understand your issue... as a writer you know where your story is going and the readers don\'t... the story is great so far... update soon
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
To increase the readability of your story, space after each paragraph. Do you have a beta, to help catch grammar, misspelling, and punctuation problems? If you don\'t, try the Yahoo Group.
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh boy! here we go did harry change any, ge any magic powers, was lucius full succbi so as harry is his soul mate he became half of lucius whole maybe, or oh the possibilities who\'s kid is he if not the potters. looking forward to more!
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October 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just one tiny thing. Succubi are female. Incubi are male. and of course those two forms are the plural.
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October 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I really adore it! :)
Yours Lucius is written just as I like him to be... *licks lips* I want more...
*looks innocently with puppy eyes* how soon will you update? I\'d really like to read more and as soon as possible *grins* :D
Love Xenia Marvolo
P.S. I saved this story on my computer in my private documents:)
P.P.S. Please update soon - I like this story so very very very much!
Yours Lucius is written just as I like him to be... *licks lips* I want more...
*looks innocently with puppy eyes* how soon will you update? I\'d really like to read more and as soon as possible *grins* :D
Love Xenia Marvolo
P.S. I saved this story on my computer in my private documents:)
P.P.S. Please update soon - I like this story so very very very much!
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October 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes its a good beginning, however, from a readers point of view the chapters are very short.
Try to increase the lengh you don\'t have to end on a cliffie everytime.
However I will be looking forward to the next chapter be it small or long.
Try to increase the lengh you don\'t have to end on a cliffie everytime.
However I will be looking forward to the next chapter be it small or long.
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October 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THis is interesting. did he get the creature inheritance from Voldy? BTW, female-Succubus (plural-Succubi) and male-Incubus (Incubi)
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October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW I READLLY LIKE THIS FIC PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE ASP
THANKS
THANKS