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I am liking your story so far. Yes, it might make sense to cut the flashback for now. But it is essential to let the readers know why it is so painful. If you cut it, it would be a lot more suspenseful. But I really like your ideas and where this story is going. Keep up the good work. This is very entertaining.

I think your plot is great! You're doing a very good job. I am impressed you said English was not your first language, I hardly noticed, except for a few errors. I havn't read a story quite like this one. Keep up the good work!

Great story! I\'m really enjoying it. Severus has one heck of a task ahead of him but I\'m sure this time he can do it. Please update soon.

It\'s a good story, but there are a few things that bother me. The grammar and spelling can be worked on through spell check. But, the other thing is the whole \"pure blood\' bit with Severus... seeing as he is a half blood... Half muggle, half wizard. Granted I know this is your story and all, it\'s just that bothers me since the sixth book came out and all.

Good job! Just I as thought. Severus\' Galfriend died long ago. Oh, how sad.... *giving a fake sad face*. Yeah right.

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Hiya, I really, really, really like this one, I tried and write some of my own but because I\'m not native English I was a bit afraid. Yours is very good though, I wish I could write like that! Please give us some more, and if you have the time read (and review) mine; it\'s under Snape/Ginny called Ginny works magic.

Another wonderful chapter. You gave a lot of interesting background information in a goodway. Though many tend to ridicule the flashback I think that, if used appropriately, it can be a marvelous thing. I also don\'t want you to worry about the language thing. They really are just a few mistakes here and there, and they really don\'t diminish the value of the story. I just want to reassure you of that. I am also more than willing to help you with any beta\'ing you may want. You may contact me at the above e-mail addy. Either way I hope to read more very soon.

Thank you for E-mailing me! I was so happy! I hardly ever have any E-mail, (even junk mail) nowadays.

So far so good. The chapters are *little* short, but... pretty good.

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Oct 12, 2005

I really love your story. You have put a great amount of detail in it, and that is always enjoyable. You do have some grammatical errors, but nothing so major as to render the story unreadable. Keep up the good work, I cannot wait to read more.