rate_review Reviews

Hmm...This one seems a bit choppier than the first one. Plus it doesn\'t follow up CinderHarry at all. I recommend you do a bunch of one shot fairy tales, like you did with CinderHarry (cuz that one was hilarious), but if you\'re going to struggle through them, then don\'t do them at all.

I like it so far! Can\'t wait to read some more!

*smile* I can\'t wait for chapter 2!

Yeah, the next story is started. Well if you read my review from Cinderharry I say on with the epilogue chapter but its completely up to you. Keep up the good job. yeah this isn\'t very coherent, I was on my way to bed when I saw this up and had to read it before I signed off. Great job by the way. I\'ll try to be more sensible in the review for the next chapter. Can\'t wait to read it.

I love it! Please update soon!

Wonderful start!! looks good LOVE it keep going

Paragraphs are not evil. Break up the brick of text you have; this will increase the readability of the piece. I got a bit of a headache even though it was short, because of the volume of the text.