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WOW - loving this story, evil Dumbledore is always fun to read :P Hope you keep up with the updating!!!

Lovely. Chapters 4 and 5 were just splendid. I liked the touches of whimsey tucked in between all the serious stuff.

So far I like this fanfic, althrough when Fanfiction.net delated this, it was up to 9 chapters. So 5 chapters down, 4 to go..So far each chapter gets better and better...I got no problem with yaoi, but the love scenes makes me feel like a voyeur...But otherwise i love this, so don\'t change anything!

This is such a great premise, and you have so much potential in the story, but...the grammar and punctuation is a very big problem. You even drop the capitals from proper names...a big no-no. As caught by the idea as I am, reading the current version is heartbreaking to me. Every English and Liberal Arts teacher and professor I ever had would be crying at the sight.

If you beta/edit yourself, I recommend two websites: 1) www.hp-lexicon.org for Potterverse spellings and facts, and 2) www.askoxford.com, a website of the Oxford English Dictionary with grammar help.

There are so many things that a spell-checker in MS Word would catch as well as just having a dictionary by the computer. Invest in White & Strunk\'s Elements of Style and you will improve your grammar, sentence structure, dialogue, and punctuation immensely.

Yo! Albus rocks! Maybe he and Corny can share a cell?

I\'m so glad I\'ve found this story here I was reading it on ffnet when they deleated it :(
Now I can re-read it as you post the new/old chapters. Great character development and descriptions
I can still find something to marvel over every time I re-read that is something rare keep it up

Celestral

wonderful
please update as soon as possible

Absolutely riveting! I just adored the explanation of House Elves too. Can\'t wait to see Dumbledore\'s tantrum and who all he drags into it.

Very cool. I like it. Can\'t wait to read the next update

This is a really great story! I just...to use Harry\'s word \'Wow!\' I really like it, the first part with the guy waking up confused me for a bit until I you explained later on. Or at least I think that\'s what you explained. I didn\'t even look for mistakes because I was too involed in your story. I know this is going to sound really stupid but who is Ar\'Ron. Is it the LotR guy or not? I was slightly confused over that but it really doesn\'t play that much into the plot. He could just be an elf you created and that wouldn\'t change anything. Do you update fair often or do you take weeks or months? I hope its fairly often.

Once again this is a really great first chapter. Really great. Keep up the excellent work.

Happy Writings