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cool story, can\'t wait to read more.

Interesting premise - you\'re off to a good start, but really could use some help with spelling and grammar. Have you considered getting a beta reader? It might also help with the flow of the story, which is a bit choppy, and a bit more exposition -- not a whole lot more, would improve it some. I think the idea of a mechanical bull at Hogwarts is pretty hilarious - you can really do a lot with the idea - very clever.

That was hilarious! But I didn\'t expect that ending. Was hoping she would torture him some more,then was shocked at her behavior ;) Wonder how he\'ll react?

I love it.
More soon as you can.