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GAH! as always the malfoys are infuriating!

that bitch lucius... ugh! i wanna rip his throat out ,for being the nasty good for nothing rotten 2 cent whore that he is!

oh and narcissa! that rotten porclian-i-know-nothing-other than- looks and ettiquet-whore! gah! so much anger..

oh dont even get me started on draco! what that boy needs is a good smack! dosent he know he should be defending harry and bitch slapping the hell out of lucius for being the no good dirty rotten 2 cent whore? geesh hello! comone sense slapp some sense into that blond block of a thing he calls a head!

*sigh*





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ok im done...

my rant is now over...


love he story btw! ^^ quite lovely

I really feel like hitting Draco. He more than deserves it. It would be great if you could invent some potion or something that would make Harry less submissive then have him go off with Maia and leave Draco to think his actions over. Prat.
~The Flame Reviews~

Please update this story... I fell in love with these characters in Indago and follow it faithfully... I need my new chapter fix...


Please, please, pretty please?

..........o.O
and I hoped that Lucius will by good :(
but I can't have ewerything, now can I? ^__^
good one. I do not like that baby ( I do not like babys...small monsters O.O ), but the story is good.
SNAPE!! where is SNAPE??!! :P
keep up the good work :*

Hahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!! Ok, my favorites....... "Are you saying Im disturbing to my husband?" and "You look like youre about to lose your job!" These things kill me.

Hello, I just read your entire story, starting from scratch so I hope you appreciate! I was surprised that I continued to read it as I don't normally like these sort of animal/au stories - but you've done quite a good job. You are good with your words and don't try to be too smart. I do have some suggestions though:

* You should consider making longer chapters, so instead of 50 something short chapters, you have 20 nice, long ones. It means more is happening in each entry and people remained hooked for longer, and obviously, for more reasons.
* You should probably consider getting another beta, I don't think they're doing their job very well. I don't mean to be nasty or anything, I'm just being honest. I'm sure you could find someone with, perhaps, more experience. There were lots of grammatical and flowing errors. I didn't mind so much - and either did a lot of others considering all your reviews! - but it can turn many off.
* The story started off very strongly, but like so many, it is now sort of becoming very un-canon and forced. It's really hard when fan fiction is written the way it is (one chapter every few days and stuff) to keep on top of it all, but try not to be too fanciful.
* I have some issues with Harry's changing disposition, particulary with the way he sees that American fellow. I understand that the Supero has controlling elements over the Subicio, but surely Harry's love for Draco would stop such clouding? If Harry truly loved Draco, every fibre of his being would be screaming out against physical contact with That American, also with Snape. Plus, I don't think Harry's pitying view toward aforementioned American is very like him, considering how protective and reserved you've made him . An ability to relate and compassion don't go hand in hand.

Okay, anyway. You really have done well. Most stories like this are just unbearable! I hope you keep writing and enjoy doing it. Please know, I meant absolutely no offence with anything I've said. If you get offended, I'M SORRY. :-( lol

*blinks herself out of a daze* Omigod... how much does poor Harry have to suffer!!! *sobz* I absolutely love this story... and the first one... which I didn't review... cuz I thought I'd save it all for this! I can't believe I read all of this in like one day! Aren't you proud of me??? I'm proud of me! This story, and the first one are absolutely wonderful! I love your idea and well basically everything you put into this story... it's like wow. It makes me wish that I could write and complete stories to this extent! ^_^ You are doin' a fantastical job! I seriously cannot wait until you update. Which will be soon, right?? Cuz I'm really eager for what happens next! Is this story going to be as long as the last one??! I hope so! I luv long stories!... when I have time of course! ^_^

Right, so I'll stop babbling at you! Wonderful story, update soon. By the way... you had me close to tears so many parts in the first story... and then some parts in this one... *gives u a standing ovation* Totally awesome!! Great job at pulling the emotions straight out of me! *coughs* Right this is the longest review I've ever left anyone... I'm wondering if I shouldn't have just emailed it to you! *gigglz* Oh well... again, (I keep repeating myself... but I blame ur awesomeness) great job... update sooon..... ^_^

Much love and Llama's

Rose

Wow! I loved it! This story gets better with every chapter. But I must ack how do you update so quickly. I mean I'm working on my own story and I can't up date near as fast as you. You're so damn fast. What's your secret?

ouch. what's wrong with harry? something seems.. off.

Erm, and is harry just gonna take that bullshit from draco? Ya'd think after so many years of obeying him, harry would finally get a spine.