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for Miscommunications

by charmingdesires

person sbkar
schedule September 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Read the second chapter out loud and you will find misused words: eight instead of either; to instead of two; et cetera. One or two are easy to overlook, but, almost each paragraph has these misused words. Reading it aloud will help avoid such mistakes.

www.dictionary.com and www.askoxford.com are great sites to help you keep on your linguistic toes.
person thrnbrooke
schedule September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Continue!!!! What happens next?
person seeker!
schedule September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved the story, but more the meaning, Something we can all take a lesson on \"Miscommunication\"
person ice owl
schedule September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What took Sevvy so long? Now he can lock them up in a nice little room together so they can screw their brains out, yes?
person thrnbrooke
schedule September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh too funny! Chapter 3 please!
person SyXX
schedule September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cute!
person fragonknight01
schedule September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was terribly cute...and human nature being what it is- the hysterical reaction of everyone is probably accurate.
person cissa malfoy
schedule September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love the story you should write more!!

Lots of Love,

Lindsey A.k.a Narcissa