rate_review Reviews

The Chapters are short too short actually one would think you were writing drabbles instead of actual chapters. It needs a lot of work sentenses and what not. It has a good plot line but sorta rushed. I myself didn\'t like the past two chapters because you barely even confronted Dumbledore with what he did. You made it seem like Hermione has forgiven him already. But it is your story and I have noticed in some of your chapters you mispelled Lucius.

My advice, spell check and possibly get a beta. There are a lot of them out there. Read the story from the readers point of view instead of just the authors.

Good Luck

Not a bad story idea but you really need a beta.

i really really like this fic and how you mad the headmaster the bad guy i hope they get out and save mione from the hell she has live in for thr last month well in till next time keep up the awesome work and please update soon later for now

angel

Thank you for rewritting the story. I think It\'s wonderful! Will you let me know when you update. Rose