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fantastic chapter... i love the fight that harry went through between his two sides... so wonderfully written into this chapter.... :)

Great story! As for store. Well how about a store that sells alchol to kids or something that would get the kids to come into the store, as well as force them to talk to Dorian. It could also be a store that has lots of contests with prizes to ensure both the town\'s ppl and students spend time thier. As for what type of store, well he could buy out the three broom sticks, or run a prank store.

update soon great chapter

How about a muggle clothing store? Kids love to shop for clothes. It could have everything from preppy to gothic to attract all types. By the way, loving the story.

Loved this chapter! It was interesting to see the conflict Harry had trying to be a leader and please Severus. As to the type of shop...maybe a coffee shop. What better to attract teens?

How about a malt shop. You know... Girls in short skirts on roller skates, malts, milkshakes, rootbeer floats, smoothies, soda fountain (with lots of different flavors), ice cream, cakes...etc... I think it\'d be interesting. It\'s definitely give the students something to talk about, and talk with him about. It\'d be something they\'d\'ve never seen.

love your story please keep updating

Why not a dance club? Between The Hog\'s Head and The Tree Broomsticks I always thought Hogsmeade was missing a meeting place for the older students. Also, it would have the added benefit that reachers would most likely avoid it.
Oh, and you wrote Tallis once instead of Dorian. I like the interactions between Dorian and Severus, but I hope you wont make Dorian too submissive. I think, their public and their private lives should be kept apart. Otherwise, Severus will become the leader in the backgroud, and I don\'t think that would be fitting. I liked your description of them earlier, when you wrote they were opposites to their private selfs in public. Severus can\'t just make the princes decisions for him, even if he is Dorians master in private. I liked how you showed he cared, though.

No worries about updating more often- you do a lot better than most authors! I LOVE Your story and check for updates all the time. I am excited to see where it is headed!

-Adia

hm.... i dont know, maybe a bit of everything, Magic the name of the store, books and artefacts and all that. as well as a cafe, in the small area. it would attract all sorts of people students adults and all. great updates both are great love em!