rate_review Reviews

*jaw drops*.....O.O *can hear catcalls in the background*...woah....update please!

I can\'t stress proof-reading your work. This was something that in school was taught on a regular basis, though when my child was in school I have to admit I never have heard her use this term. Once you have written your chapters, go back as if you are reading it for the first time yourself and read what you have written. This is a time to check for spelling, but also equally important, it is a chance to check for commas and the like, and one of the most important, to see if the sentence makes sense to the best of your intentions. Can it be perceived by someone in a way that you did or didn\'t mean. The written word is a easy to misunderstand as when it is spoken. That\'s why I find that some of my favorite writers out there take the time to well explain why a character did what they did, or what they were thinking, and also doing so for the other characters surrounding the main character. I find that technique allows the reader to feel as though they are right there in the story and that is always good. The doctor.

1) The story moves really fast. The characters have no intention.
2) It\'s either \"could\'ve\" or \"could have\" - \"could of\" makes no sense.
(I wouldn\'t be reviewing if not for the \"could of\", but I thought I\'d give you a little help for your story too)

Fantastic! I can\'t wait for chapter 4! Hermione left Harry with Draco? Hmm. So what happens next?

wow
*drools*
that was freakin\' awesome!!!
update?

Whoa! Draco came in polite and called him Harry. What is up with that? Can\'t wait for chapter 3!

Fantastic!

Hurry! Humanity needs another brilliant chapter by you!

This story is cute so far!! Please write more chapters, I love them!!! I can\'t wait to see what happens next!! Good work!!!!!!!!

this is going to be good i can tell!

Wow i\'m so impressed by your original plot line. Please keep going, because if you dont i may actually live another day without killing myself.