rate_review Reviews

Very, very nice. I don't trust myself to write a sequel. In fact, I don't trust myself to write anything about Harry Potter since I haven't read the books.

That was so sweet. I think that has to be one of my new favourite ones. That's always the way I imagne Draco, where he can't love anyone (or doesn't think he can) because he doesn't really know what love is. I also love how you put Sirius in there towards the end and he was the stranger that helped Draco make up his mind about needing to tell Harry. The sweetness at the end almost had me crying, because Draco was able to just you know tell Harry, and well I can't explain it very well, but this is definatly one of my new favourites.

~Gracy

Your stories have good energy and zest, but you really need a beta for for grammar and vocabulary. You've used double negatives as if they're simple negatives (when Harry kisses Draco and says Draco cannot deny he didn't like it - that means Harry is saying that Draco cannot lie about the fact that he really DIDN'T like the kiss); you get mixed up in the time line (when Harry and ron fight one day before christmas, then both sulk for a few days and the finally ONE DAY BEFORE CHRISTMAS Ron approaches Harry again); you've used "unforgivingly" in every sex scene so far (I just finished chapter 8), but what's worse you've started using it a few times in each now - it's too repetitive, use a thesarus, think of something else to use, but this is marring perfectly good sex scenes. Generally the vocabulary the story works with is a bit slim - try using a thesarus, it's really helpfull, and you get used to spotting repititions and expand your vocabulary as you use the thesarus. Word has thesarus in the Settings==>language section.

Also, since this is not a complaint to upset you but a critisism with the belief that things should improve as you keep writing, and that you have talent and energy to write very good stories, I'm pointing you in the direction of a beta site: http://community.livejournal.com/find_me_a_beta/ .

Best regards,
Alexa.

do you know how much of a pain in the arse this is. it's a great fic and all and i love your work but has anyone actually strated writing a decent sequal to this? and how we gonna know when it crops up? yeah i know links (mutters) but still...aww heck, theres no point...fine whatever, but i really hate an unfinished fic. and i really want the rest of the other fix finished!!

I read this story a long time ago when it was still much shorter, I'm glad the two got together . . . I love D/H matches . . . it's a well written story, two people from emotionally desolate backgrounds learning what it means to love, yep definite A+ on my list!

wicked!!!!

Awwwwww!!!! *squeel* That was so cute! Normally I don't read Nonmag fics, but this one caught my curiosity. *grin* I'm glad it did. You gave me quite a few ideas from this. *smirk* And a couple new twists to add to my version of Harry. Excellent! The only drawback I felt was the lack of Harry's background. We got more then enough of Draco and anyone that thought Draco wasn't done well enough, clearly has the depth meter of a Goldfish! Harry started out with a heavy personality, but seemed to lighten up quite a bit. Other then that, I thought it was brilliant! *grin* You had be laughing my arse off over the 'crimes' the boys had commited. *smirk* Especially Draco's filling that car with cement. *snicker* Great fic!

I would love to do the sequel to this story but I would like to be able to have some time to write out the sequel and then post it. My time on the computer is also limited to where I'm barred from using the laptop and I have to constantly beg my mom. So now that I've been able to procure the password to the computer, I'll be able to type this up sometime because I'll be able to hack my way into my own computer. But I would like a reply from you to see if you will allow me to write the sequel. Obviously it's going to mention you and end with a happy ending and Draco and Harry are going to be together. Thank you.

~Dark~

P.S. I kinda checked out the reviews to see if anyone wanted to do the sequel but as I didn't see anyone offering, I've offered. Plus I wanted to.

MERRY CHRISTMAS

Great and hot! I liked the way Harry and Draco built up feelings until it became a relationship. This Lucy is a nice person.
I\'ve got a question: Did Sirius know that Draco wanted to be with Harry? Or did he only know about some guy? Or maybe figured out that it was Harry?
Please keep going! I mean, we don\'t have any reactions yet. The have to come out as a couple. Ron has to accept it and Blaise will have to know. Maybe Draco will be introduced to Seamus and Dean? Not to forget some nice smut with lots and lots of kisses. Please?!