schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great start! This is a different premise than I\'ve seen in awhile. It\'s a nice change. Can\'t wait to see how this proceeds. Update soon!
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
there\'s nothing awful about the lime scene. i love it. love your story. kinf of funny who both were really nervous. hope u update really soon.
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice start! Sounds realistic and I love it!
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh I\'m so hooked in this! Need to get more! Just... Amazing...
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
looove it! were the orbs a one time thing? or do they have a lasting effect?? :) update please!!!
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked it alot!
Very intruiging! I wanna know what the orbs are!
Update soon!
Very intruiging! I wanna know what the orbs are!
Update soon!
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great Start.
Can\'t wait for more
Can\'t wait for more
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love the basic story about it but its a killer on the eyes...maybe make the paragraphs a bit shorter...and...i cant tell when someone\'s talking and when they\'re thiinking so maybe \" \"s if someones talking and \'s if it\'s a thought...
schedule
August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is an awsome story line. I can\'t wait to read more.