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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
noooooooooooooo!!!!!
Mean, mean author, give the boys a BREAK!!! At least let them get a good shag in before you throw the next calamity at them, please. choccie please, with sprinkles and hot fudge sauce.
Mean, mean author, give the boys a BREAK!!! At least let them get a good shag in before you throw the next calamity at them, please. choccie please, with sprinkles and hot fudge sauce.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Niccce, very niccce. Pleassse continue asss sssoon asss posssible.
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January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have a complaint : your chapiters are too short ! And why severus is not marked yet ?
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January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this was just wow....... you know your "stupid" chapter made me cry......... and pleeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaassssssssssseeeeeeeee hurry up and make the next chapter. (sniff) i dont wanna see harry die.......WAAAAAAAAAH! ;_;
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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
gggrrrrrrrrrr! you just had to leave the chapter off like that didn't you! well please hurry with the update i'm really surprised with how much i like this story, i don't usually read the time travel ones, but it would be oh so torturous to make us wait forever(and not in the fun way) so please hurry** gives bug puppy dog eyes and pouty lip**
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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story, especially all the emotions it stirs. I hope that Severus arrives in time to save Harry. Keep up the good work and please update soon.
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January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
good chapter, bye
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January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What happened ? You know, that's very mean to let us poor readers like that.
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December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I would like to state first and foremost I like the story, the plot has merit, and I like where you're taking it. Lucius is slightly OOC and is actually five years Sev's senior but it's fiction and a simple AU warning at the beginning ususally suffices for the die hard canon fans.
I do have a question though, have you sent this off for a beta? I noticed just a few things really throughout that trips up the reader and having them fixed would make this an even better story. Sometimes it's just a simple mistake, confine in chapter one... I think you meant confide. phantom in the same chapter did you mean fathom? You also tend to switch tenses, which is a grammatical no no, it really makes the reader falter. A beta would fix all these problems, trust me I've learned the value of a beta ^_^, they're great help, especially since they can also help to keep your story on track.
As I said before I *DO* like this story and I want it to continue, but I'd also like to see it beta'd should you decide to take my advice I'll be more than happy to read it again and review with less criticism and more gush ^_^;.
If you want to contact me, I left my email. Cheers and Happy Hols
Aracale.
I do have a question though, have you sent this off for a beta? I noticed just a few things really throughout that trips up the reader and having them fixed would make this an even better story. Sometimes it's just a simple mistake, confine in chapter one... I think you meant confide. phantom in the same chapter did you mean fathom? You also tend to switch tenses, which is a grammatical no no, it really makes the reader falter. A beta would fix all these problems, trust me I've learned the value of a beta ^_^, they're great help, especially since they can also help to keep your story on track.
As I said before I *DO* like this story and I want it to continue, but I'd also like to see it beta'd should you decide to take my advice I'll be more than happy to read it again and review with less criticism and more gush ^_^;.
If you want to contact me, I left my email. Cheers and Happy Hols
Aracale.
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i hope you update more regulary, likes becuase its a great story,