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for Voldermort must die

by aphroditiewicca

person Aragon
schedule September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It is too much if I expect you to know the NAMES of the characters you write about? It\'s Voldemort. Not VoldeRmort - and since you misspelled several times (beginnning with your title!) I don\'t think it was a typo....
person Sirius_harley
schedule September 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like the premise of the story and am interested on where you\'re taking the readers. The writing is a bit disjointed and spelling/grammer should be checked more carefully. Plus, 6 chapters in and no sex? It better come soon and in a manner of writing that\'s better than what has been shown so far to keep my interest.
schedule September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it so far. I want to see more.
Less unresolved sexual tension and more sex please.
person Sea
schedule September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good start - looking forward to finding out more. You might want to have your story beta\'ed to catch some simple spelling errors, etc. Keep up the good work.