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Amazing! Please continue!

please....oh pretty please.....write more on this story.

it is good, but sometimes i have trouble understanding everything you are saying

also is there any way to get a translation of the chapter titles...I don't know what they mean
English is my language.

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Im rather tired as I wright this so Ill make it short pleas pleas contiue the story as its one of the best I have read sofar.

I hope you can upload more of this soon. I am enjoying it greatly.

I like your story wery much, though I don't understand why you had to go and change the main caracters names. I just don't get it. It's a good story, the chapters could be a bit longer and you could update a bit more often. Bu, the story is good so far.

I love it!! It's great- and I'm glad your not making it a harry/ginny I abhor that pairing... So you've goy it in harry snape- so I take it he's going to one day e his new siblings dominate father's lover or something like that? lol Good story though- update when you can!!!

So Voldie made them Horcuxes, right?
Their 'Father' is Snape?
The other donors are various death eaters?

I don't know if you know this but you got the dates wrong. Harry was born in 1980 and would have been left at the Dursley's 1981 and in 1992 he would be at Hogwarts already
Okay I go read some more now only on chapter two ^_^

Ok, it was pretty easy to read and interesting up until the snake girl....then it got jumbled up and confusing..and seemed like a really long boring babble instead of a dialog. I think it could be a really good scene if you change it around a little bit, make it less redundant and give the characters more emotion and personality. Try to make it clear what they are talking about and take out the random "joke" type sentances that don't contribute to your story. They are a distraction..if you want jokes to be in harry's personality...well..try to not make the jokes ramble on like a run on sentance (yes i know i'm a hypocrite..but then again i'm not a writer, i just enjoy reading fanfic)
I really think your ideas are great..and your writing will improve if you work on your dialog and take out destracting parts that don't contribute towards your plotline. Keep writing and keep improving!
Oh, by the way i like taht Peteunia was actually..semi kind to harry..it never made sense to me in JK's books that she would have completly neglected him..'cause a child wont develop properly...learn to talk properly...and things like that if they have NEVER been shown anything but...yelling..or being ignored.

Being obsessive compulsive myself, I can tell you that people with OCD can be aware of what they\'re doing. There is just this obsessive need to do it anyways and if you don\'t it just drives you up a wall.