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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WHY HAVE U NOT UPDATED
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like it so far update soon!
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August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it...
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August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I did enjoy it but may I point out a few little things just to help you out.
1. I think you started the story well, the fisrt paragraph drew me in so good job with that, but I felt that maybe your first chapter was a little too short, and you could have gone into a little more detail here rather than waste it on Draco\'s painful journey (poor little love!) back to his room. Adding little teasers of things to come further in the story without giving too much away is always good as it grabs the interest of the reader more.
2. A couple of grammar/spelling mistakes, but hey no ones perfect! I read through mine thoroughly (or so I think) then I notice a teeny mistake after ive posted, d\'oh!
I hope that my comments have helped you, and please continue with this fic, it does have promise and I enjoyed reading it :) Let me know when you have a new chapter up and ill be sure to give it a read! xx
1. I think you started the story well, the fisrt paragraph drew me in so good job with that, but I felt that maybe your first chapter was a little too short, and you could have gone into a little more detail here rather than waste it on Draco\'s painful journey (poor little love!) back to his room. Adding little teasers of things to come further in the story without giving too much away is always good as it grabs the interest of the reader more.
2. A couple of grammar/spelling mistakes, but hey no ones perfect! I read through mine thoroughly (or so I think) then I notice a teeny mistake after ive posted, d\'oh!
I hope that my comments have helped you, and please continue with this fic, it does have promise and I enjoyed reading it :) Let me know when you have a new chapter up and ill be sure to give it a read! xx