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November 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I read a few lines of this story and that was enough.
First of, here's how you write a conversation.
"Oh dear god, this story is utter crap,' said the offended reader.
"Oh noes, that can't be true,' said the author.
Yeah, that's an example.
It was terrible, please fix it.
First of, here's how you write a conversation.
"Oh dear god, this story is utter crap,' said the offended reader.
"Oh noes, that can't be true,' said the author.
Yeah, that's an example.
It was terrible, please fix it.
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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear god...
I think I might die of shock.
Would you mind giving me the adress of your english teacher because he/she has got to die.
This is, probably, the worst fanfic I've ever read.
When there's conversation you put " around the things they say.. .Here's an example.
"Wow, The story Harry and Hermione's secret sure sucks, ey Ron?" Said Harry.
Apart from being horribly written, the conversation is also unrealistic and plain stupid.
I think I might die of shock.
Would you mind giving me the adress of your english teacher because he/she has got to die.
This is, probably, the worst fanfic I've ever read.
When there's conversation you put " around the things they say.. .Here's an example.
"Wow, The story Harry and Hermione's secret sure sucks, ey Ron?" Said Harry.
Apart from being horribly written, the conversation is also unrealistic and plain stupid.
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August 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Fucking sucked. Learn how to fucking use periods, commas, and capitalization! Stupid idiot.
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December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
pretty good story. could use a little work though
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December 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good story
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September 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so maybe this could use a little work. Punctuation, and spelling errors could very easily be fixed, and to say that your dialogue needs work would be a serious understatement. You need to have correct Grammar in your title as well. It should read, \"Harry and Hermione\'s Secret Revealed\" All proper words capitalized, and an apostrophe (a \"flying comma\" because I know you\'re english skills are lacking) to show posession. It\'s not the secret of more than one Hermione, it\'s the secret that belongs to Harry and Hermione.
Maybe you should think about taking an anatomy class. And having sex or watching porn or reaching your thirteenth birthday. Real sex doesn\'t happen like that. Even Porn sex doesn\'t happen like that.
Maybe you should think about taking an anatomy class. And having sex or watching porn or reaching your thirteenth birthday. Real sex doesn\'t happen like that. Even Porn sex doesn\'t happen like that.
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September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...this is story is a piece of shit. The punctuation sucks and the grammar is horrible. And do us all a favor and don\'t review your owns story.
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg this fic sucks.really.are u even 18? its like a child with no knowlage in literature wrote this.PS:I hope u die from having too much shit in your head.
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hahahahahahahahahahahahahhaha!!!! You are so fucking lame! i oticed that a lot of the good revies u recieved(like 5)were written by yourself!You should hav hanged your email dipshit.PS:i hope some1 ties ur penis in a not so when u hav to piss it explodes...dumbass.