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nice story if there is more i would love to read it

This is a bloody good story full of love humour courage all the good stuff. But i'm not a writer so i can't truley say just how good this story is. thank for the great read and i also really enjoy the squel keep up the good work. PS sorry if i miss spelled any of this my spelling isn't to good.

Congratulations on writing such an amazing story! I am glad you're going to make a sequel(sP?) to this, and i hope its as good if not better than Fortress of Woe!

Hey, this is the first Review I have ever written, but I have been reading this site for a very long time.
I am writting this to tell, what you wrote was a brilliant story. I am quite impressed.
Take Care

Sad......:(

You've got some good ideas here, but there is room for improvement in your writing style. I recommend using italics or single quotes for internal monologue, or you can just shift perspective to write the story in 1st person as Harry. At the moment private thoughts and verbal comments read the same in your writing. Also stop to consider each character and their personality before you write their dialogue. I doubt Ginny would bother to compare Harry to a "Time Bomb" if she doesn't know what one is. Some of the best fun of writing fan fic is trying to figure out colloquialisms and references that are appropriate to characters in a fantasy environment. Perhaps Harry is like a "Time Delay Incineration Charm". Give it some thought, if you'd like a bit of help drop me an email.

Olwen

This is by far the best story i have ever read on this site, i thoughaly congradulate you and all that ... this was amzing and if you make a sequal I will read thanks again for the entertaintment

I thought the Yule Ball only occurs when there is a triwizard tornament.

What do you mean "The End?????".....Why are the question marks there???Are u planning a sequel???Anyways terrific way to end the story

bravo, a very well written story.

i hope to see more fics from you.