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for No Longer Helpless

by DB2020

person sunny
schedule October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I can\'t believe that its over!!!! I loved this story...your Draco and Hermione ere great!!!! But I kinda feel the same as that other person in that I am still hoping that it isn\'t indeed the end....I need more!!!! I don\'t kno if its cuz I hate that its over and can\'t accept that alll good things must come to an end or if I just need more of an end end...if that makes any sense.....Maybe I just need a SEQUEL!!!!! You are an amazing talent....please keep on riting!!!!
person Lix
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That\'d best not be it~!~~~
person cleopatra
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Its finished! I loved it! I hope you keep writing more Draco/Hermione stories - you are a very good writer and I thoroughly enjoyed reading each and every chapter. Blain is funny! Thanks again
person JTBJAB
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! That was amazing! I was wondering how everyone was going to survive when her powers \"erupted\"! Brilliant!

Well done on keeping this up - I know it can be hard to keep the enthusiasm or make the time in the real world to write! Well done with that!

person Andraea Shade
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
SQUEEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! GOOD STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person Trace
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey...I\'ve been following this story since it was first posted. I haven\'t wanted to review before the end..but I must admit that was an awesome story.
A great mix of all the elements, and just simply amazing writing!!
I do hope you write another Draco/Hermione story (i love that couple lol)
best of luck!
person angel eyes
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
perfect ending to a great story. thanks so much for writing it. i loved every minute of it. thank you again. it was truly a pleasure.
person Lix
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, me again. I still say that had better not be the end. Not only do I love your story, but ... well I wanted more of an ending than that!! I have no idea what I mean by that so, guess this isn\'t really a helpful review.

But I do have something to say in response to a different reviewer. Paragraphs can be however long you like them. If you limit yourself to 5-6 sentances a pargraph you limit the possibilities. Honestly somethings are just said better, with better flow and what not in a 12 sentance paragraph. And some in a 2 sentance paragraph. Always go with what feels right to the mood of the story at that particular moment, and ignore conventions. That\'s how you get people hooked.

Much love to you, and you\'d best post another story soon if this was in fact it.
person angel
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was incredible i love it ... i like how you made sure that draco mione and blain stayed in touch ...well how blain just randomly showed up and scared the other kids i loved i cant wait in till you next story in till then keep up the awesome work and later for now

angel
person Anon
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooh, was that the end?