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for No Longer Helpless

by DB2020

person angel
schedule October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow ... he came for her himself well he must reall like/want her then ...please update soon and in till next time keep up the awesome work and later for now

angel
person Kristal
schedule October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
uncool!
a cliff hanger!!
i want more! u cant do this to me!!!
PLEASE update ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
hehe
thnx
Kristal
(emails:))
person Bulma
schedule October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey, I really like your story it\'s well put together and thought out and I love the characters. There\'s just one little problem. Your parapraghs are too long and it makes it really hard to read sometimes. I think I\'m only on chappy 13 and it might change in the later chappys but for future reference, remember that a paragraph is actually five or six sentences sometimes less and maybe a little more but not as huge as what you are doing now. But remember you story is really good, \'cause I\'m still reading it and I only read the best. You have great grammar, and again I like how you describe and write about the characters it\'s very good. Thanks for writing the story.

Later,
Bulma
person AZCatFan
schedule October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for updating! Ron & Harry\'s reaction was spot on! I can hardly wait for the final battle!
person JTBJAB
schedule October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Definitely a tense chapter - I am dying for the next chapter!
person Bulma
schedule October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok...I got to chappy sixteen and I saw that you had started the better paragraphing. Thank you *bows*

Keep up the good work!! ^_~
person Serentipity01
schedule October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Every time there is a new chapter up, it just makes my day! Thanks! I love that Hermione is rapidly developing an \'experimental streak\', so to speak ;) AND I love that you\'re bringing Blain back - stroke of genius, that! Keep it up, You\'re creating something absolutely beautiful here :)
person Hanna Delacour
schedule October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Blain again! I love Blain! He\'s funny... can\'t wait to see what Draco has in store for the vampires. Anyways, impressed and loving this fic as always!
person intcrimgrrl
schedule October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is building so nicely - I have particularly loved the last three chapters. Starting with Draco\'s drunken declaration, his confession, and the public declaration. I can\'t wait to see where you take this next.
person Kristal
schedule October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ahhhh!!! hurry up and update!!!!!!
i want more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please update asap!!
i still want to know what dracos powers are! why havent you elaborated on it yet?
(i finally remembered it when im posting!)
thnx
Kristal
(emails:))