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Formatting is broken, it's un-readable.

Amazing, but you need to add more to it.

Interesting start, I'd like to be able to read more

Excellent start. But you need the back story. The rason why he started his collection. I am guess he has Tonks, Hermione, and Fluer in his collection.
His collection is actually missing he need a werewolf, full veela and a muggle for it to be truly complete. Can\'t wait see where this goes next.

A Half-Veela, a Pure-Blood, a Half-Blood, and a Muggle-Born.

Hmm. Fleur, Narcissa, Tonks, and Hermione?

tis seemd like a nifty plot bunny to the other story. Will she be worked into the big story?

Very good, very good indeed. Although, it was a little short for my tastes. If you intended for this to be good porn, then I recommend drawing out the sex scenes a little
I actually think this one shows more promise than Sisters, I just didn\'t much like the way you focused on Ron so much in that one. So, who are the other girls going to be?
Can\'t wait for more!
-Sahaqiel

sweet update fast, like everyday

An interesting one shot. I find the situation of Harry being such a bad-ass to be a bit amusing and intriguing. He obviously is at least a little \"Dark\" seeing his comment of having a collection and using a mind control spell to intentionally bind the vampire to himself.

The best thing about this story is that it is designed to be a one-shot; we come in on a situation already in play without knowing all of the background or motivations for the actions. We really don\'t need to know more than what we have been told. And yet, there is a great deal of subplot and back-story hinted at that makes the reader wonder and want more. The others in Harry\'s \"collection\", are they there by choice or were they taken forcibly like Daphne? And who makes up the members of the \"collection\"? All in all, I would not be disappointed if you decided to revisit this universe and expand upon what you have hinted at.

Chris

Wow, this is cool, prahaps you can continuse this plot idea.