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for Anastasia and the Slytherin

by amypotter

person Anon
schedule August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m British, and I feel strangely ofended by this story. O_o Y\'know, we\'re not all \"Oh, I say! Perfectly smashing weather, what? Golly! Goodness, I appear to have a humongous bug up my arse! Oh well. Toodle-pip, old chap!\"-esque uptight 50\'s movie rejects. And England isn\'t all \"gray and dingy\" - someone for the love of god tell me that this isn\'t how ALL Americans think!

Oh, and this IS a Mary-Sue, seriously. It ticks all the boxes.
person WriterLady1031
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Honey, this is a Mary Sue. No matter how hard you try to defend it, this is a Mary-Sue down to the little bit of her being European royalty. People on here can see a Mary Sue a mile away.

person Disappointed
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh look, another mary-sue, but I see you\'ve gone one step further and made her a mean hypocritical racist.

We really don\'t need more stories like this around... good luck in your future writing.
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
How can you be racist to Europeans?! She\'s just defensive about her nationality, is all.

She\'s NOT a Mary Sue. She has some really bad flaws, and they\'ll come out later when she explains about her past.
person Anon
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, Tom Marvolo Riddle/Lord Voldemort is the LAST descendant of Slytherin. Does you knowing the meaning of the word \"last?\" It means that your little Sue can\'t be descended from Slytherin. Also, I don\'t see anything in your very short chapter that makes it suitable for this website. Why must you force people to scroll pass this crap in search of decent fics?