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July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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July 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this story - very well done! I would leave the bonus chapters as they are, I think they would work better as is.
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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a superbly written and plotted tale; I have only reached halfway through chapter four, and I am enjoying it immmensely. You have cleverly taken on Rowling\'s characters and given them true verisimilitude. You have also helped me to make sense of the clues Rowling gives about the death of Dumbledore. I am relatively new to the Harry Potter novels, and extremely new to these fanfiction pages. I have never been moved to the point of submitting any kind of review or criticism of anything online before, so I hope you\'ll forgive me if I overstep the mark here...
Please do not take the next part of my critique negatively; I assure you it is not intended that way:
Although you are mostly getting the British English spot on, there are some Americanisms in your prose which grate in the mind of a very pedantic British reader such as myself. It may be that you do not care about these, and indeed, why should you? However if you are interested in having your work Beta\'d (I believe is the term) by a reader who can point the solecisms out to you and suggest appropriate English alternatives, I would be very delighted, in fact honoured to be of service to you.
Whether or not you are interested in my proposal, may I say again what a terrific story you are spinning here, thank you very much!
Please do not take the next part of my critique negatively; I assure you it is not intended that way:
Although you are mostly getting the British English spot on, there are some Americanisms in your prose which grate in the mind of a very pedantic British reader such as myself. It may be that you do not care about these, and indeed, why should you? However if you are interested in having your work Beta\'d (I believe is the term) by a reader who can point the solecisms out to you and suggest appropriate English alternatives, I would be very delighted, in fact honoured to be of service to you.
Whether or not you are interested in my proposal, may I say again what a terrific story you are spinning here, thank you very much!
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September 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved it! A great way to wrap up all the characters\' endings! Awesome.
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September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am so into SS/HG fiction and this is good. Sad but good . I am looking forward to Severus becoming himself again and being with Hermione for the rest of their lives. Update soon.
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September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You really have a knack with a story. The bonus chapters were great. Personally, I like the flow of Snape Redux without those bonus chapters embedded into the main story but that\'s just my opinion. Thanks again for sharing a super story.
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September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi Barbara,
Did you miss the chapter called Sandy White? Did you read the epilogue? This story is over, finito, kaput. Nothing more to update. That was a bonus chapter as in outtake. Thanks for your kind words and your encouragement!
AprilG.
Did you miss the chapter called Sandy White? Did you read the epilogue? This story is over, finito, kaput. Nothing more to update. That was a bonus chapter as in outtake. Thanks for your kind words and your encouragement!
AprilG.
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September 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Hee!* I loved this whole story, and the extras where great also.
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September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome bonus chapter - can\'t wait for the second half. The hospital scene was realisitic yet funny all at the same time, and wow does Viktor have knowledge!! She could learn a lot from him!!