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Your first fic?! This was fantastic! Loved every minute!

*looks confused and speaks in a squeaky voice* what? Boys can't have babies what?

Got to say that I love this story. Would love to see it branch off into another set of stories (Ron and Snape perhaps, love to see more Dramione too). You never did explain how Ron is having a baby (girl parts maybe). Would make for an interesting side story. I would love a copy of the family trees too. Like where you went with the stories and I am excited to read more of your work.

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I agree with Gryffindor_slytherin about a lot of inconsistencies. But I absolutely loved this story...


All the way up untill the last shower. How is it possible for Ron to be pregnant? Unless he was born with working girl parts, but then he would be a girl, rather than a boy.

I dont know. I loved it all the way up till then.

Well, this is a very lovely story. Heartwarming even. But...

You seem to have used both British and American spelling--consistency, especially with snigger (British) and snicker (American), which was both used throughout the story. I don't think Ron would use the word "pop." Isn't that an American slang used in the '50s and '60s? (E.g., Mom and Pop, you used "mum" but then go on to use "pop"...)

Also, there seems to be major plotholes. How did Lucius escape from Azkaban? I thought it was impenetrable...Sirius only escaped because he was an Animigus and there was a mass breakout previously because the Dementors abandoned their post and went over to Voldemort. Also, they didn't know who was betraying them before. Azkaban is Ministry owned, so couldn't the Aurors dig into the records of who visited Lucius while he was in Azkaban? Or ask the Warden? Shouldn't he be in a top security cell? How can he still have visitors, shouldn't that right be denied? How can Draco just Floo there? Isn't security really tight and you need to take a boat there because it's on an island ("in the middle of the North Sea")? When Fudge came from a visit from Azkaban after Sirius escaped, he was drenched in water (Book 6, chapter 1).

Narcissa said Lucius is her ex-husband, then why did she want Hermione to call her, "Mother Malfoy." If she's divorced, wouldn't she automatically be reverted back to Narcissa Black? I know Hermione sees Arthur and Molly as her surrogate father and mother, but what about her own parents? Wouldn't they be insulted or jealous? I can understand if they've passed away, but they're still alive! Even if she did marry Ron, I can only see her just saying their first names...because doing so otherwise would just be insulting her own parents...er, how did you derive "Mya" from "Hermione"? Not that there's anything wrong with Mya, it's just that I can't really make the connection...

I'm confused about the Heartbonding. If this existed (in a group versus a couple) because of the "Golden Trio," then how come Harry, Ron, and Hermione didn't feel it previously? And how can Hermione NOT notice something is up with Ron if he's been having an affair for three years?? It just doesn't make any sense if Hermione is the brightest witch in a century...

But I really did enjoy reading the story! I don't mean to be too harsh, it's just the little things I notice and then as I read, I get confused...

Good story -- some interesting plot devices. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

cant wait!!

Just read the story straight through now that it is complete. Great story!
Keep going with your writing and I'll look forward to your next one.

Wooo Hooo Great job Maya!!!! I'm so glad you finished but yet I'm sad it's over. Conflicted much?!! I'm looking forward to your next endeavor.

yayyyyy!!!!! I'm so gald to see you back Mya. I can't wait for the new fic!!!