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for Sinful Behavior

by bbluebabies

person er....
schedule August 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
did you kno that the last chapter isnt\'t there?
person Jessica
schedule August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
if im nt wrong, *unless my comp is screwed* chp 6 is same as chp 5... ><
person mymy
schedule August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice, but the newest chapter is the same as the last !
person Mione
schedule August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon!
I check everytime I am online - which is everyday - to see if you have written a new chapter and am most upset when you haven\'t. I think this is going to be a really great story but it is so annoying when authers in general don\'t update regularly (however, I know exactly what is it like to have a severe case of writers\' block).

I think some of you reviewers were being rather harsh on you really, If you want an absolutly perfect story then maybe you shouldust go and read a published book becuase mistakes can be made sooooo easily and you can\'t always spot your own errors. ^.^

person Dani
schedule August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think you have a potentially good story here, but I think you should consider a beta to review your work. There are some area\'s that are a little choppy. Like one minute Draco is walking into the bathroom and the next he is in a library. Maybe consider a line or something under the text where time changes? Also, in the beginning where you use both Virginia and Ginevra is confusing. At first I thought Ginny had a split personality or something. lol, Anyway, I hope I didn\'t offend you, but I really do like to plot of the story and I hope you update often.
person Mione
schedule August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is really very entertaining ^.^
Please update soon.
Thankyou
person Crookshanks
schedule August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Um....wow that was amazin but can u like, i no...FINISH IT

thanx
person Skitt
schedule July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG HOW CRUEL U REPEATED A CHAPTER *dies* so unfair XD liked it though very.......creepy XD lmao its cool
person Jenny
schedule July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is pretty good. I just have a few notes. Ron\'s middle name is Bilius. You missed a few \"Virginia\"s when you changed Ginny\'s name. Blaise is a boy. That\'s as far as I\'ve gotten.
person Jenny
schedule July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh. And Chapter 6 is just a repost of Chapter 5. Thought ya might want to at least change that. And if you want a few other Slytherin girl names to replace Blaise with if you do, there\'s Tracey Davis and Daphne Greengrass.

keep up the good story though!