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great

Where have you gone???.. please post its killing me : (

PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON

Love it please update soon

Great chapter 4! I love it! I hope you will be updating again and soon!

Tiffany

UGH! I was so bummed when i finished and realized there was no \"next chapter\" button. I hope that you plan to update this story. I love the way you have the two interacting - so fiery and passionate. Wonderful and I cannot wait for more!!!

I\'m sooo glad you finally updated! Damn real life for it\'s untimely intrusions! I am enjoying your story very much, it\'s great writing! Hope you can update soon as possible- maybe you can just barricade yourself away for awhile! That would be so nice, but very unrealistic, I know! Keep up the writing, dearie! Tengo que irme! Salud! Killer K

Very good beginning. You captured the mayham and irritability of the airport perfectly. You do an excellent job with your descriptions of places. I can\'t wait to read the other posted chapters. Now, the criticisms. Please explain why Hermione and Snape are travelling by airplane and not floo,portkey,or broom. Please provide an explanation for why Snape is so comfortable doing things the muggle way. As Snape would say,\" Remeber you are a witch.\" Why did they have to carry their luggage; wouldn\'t they have shrunk it at least and put it in their pockets? Although I like the sound of the word tinkle, it refers to a sound not a feeling. Consider changing to tingle or tickle. Also, I think you should re-work Snape\'s explantion for why he could magically put away their clothes but she couldn\'t perform more advanced magic. At least change the phrase \"big magic.\" My biggest peeve so far is Hermione\'s attitude. This just seems so out of character compared to cannon. I just don\'t buy that after being the smart one, the brains,the bossy one, and spying for the order, that Hermione really just wants to give up control to have a man solve all of her problems. I also didn\'t understand why,in the taxi, he referred to Hermione as a tramp. Where did that come from? Overall, I like this story and can\'t wait to read the rest, but I hope you take a more critical examination of your characterizations of the Hermione and Snape.

Well, Snape put his foot in it didn\'t he? Of course, after the names and comments he made to her, I can\'t say I felt much sympathy. Thanks for the update, hope tere is another one soon.

This is so good. Please update soon.