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for Department of Mysteries

by mione

person Anon
schedule September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have only read the first chapter so far...i plan on reading the rest but you really need to work on your seplling, especially on characters names. Heh i know i'm one to talk..but then again i am not a writer..
person Anon
schedule September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like that you brought a bit of realism in by having Harry upset over the murder of 13 people..even if they were "evil" You might want to add in some snarklyness that we love about Snape. It is part of his personality after all, he can be kind and stil sound sarcastic at the same time. You went from him being in teh hospital wing to him being in class..care to explain that a bit more? I hope you give us more chapters soon.
person jw
schedule January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like it hope to read more
person jw
schedule January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like it hope to read more
person momoko
schedule January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
good story
person Buckbeak
schedule November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, good start. Please keep it up. You do have some small technical issues, but don\'t let anyone discourage you. I\'ll be looking for updates. Stick with it!
person cdkobasiuk
schedule November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aw ratz ya left me hanging. I am very intruigued.

cdk
person yumenoyami
schedule November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow ^^ it surely improved since the intro ^^ keep up the good work ;)
person thrnbrooke
schedule November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh can\'t wait for chapter 2! Please let me know when you\'ve updated!
person MyGildedCage (on ff.net)
schedule July 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The concept and the way you are going about are both nice. my only quams are that you need a beta reader and its spelt Magonagal... look up the spelling please. Also this intro was horribly short. Ptologues aer normally atleast 3 pages and chapters can be from anywhere around 5 pages to 100. I find when I write it is good to set a goal for the length of all chapters. It makes a more consistant story and easier to read.