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May 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed your story. As I got to the later chapter, I kept thinking back to the beginning. There's a very interesting progression in the characters. Good job!
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May 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Me encant
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May 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just found this story today and read the whole thing. It was brilliant! Wonderful characterization!
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May 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
btw, I really like Chapter 23 in particular--Hermione and Draco's interaction over Quidditch, Draco teasing Harry that he needs lessons in snogging, Draco remembering Ginny's cattiness, and Harry's intro to wizarding politics.
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May 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
4th paragraph--house-elf experimenting depression--experimenting should be experiencing
you have such great detail in this epilogue! I love the maze with the fake monsters in particular. The accidental magic in the sandbox was great too. I also like Hermione trying not to overwork Winky, Hermione taunting the portraits, and having to fool the Malfoy Manor anti-contraception spells by going on vacation. Hermione blasting open the door of her prison was pretty funny too.
Have I mentioned how much I love the maze with fake monsters?
you have such great detail in this epilogue! I love the maze with the fake monsters in particular. The accidental magic in the sandbox was great too. I also like Hermione trying not to overwork Winky, Hermione taunting the portraits, and having to fool the Malfoy Manor anti-contraception spells by going on vacation. Hermione blasting open the door of her prison was pretty funny too.
Have I mentioned how much I love the maze with fake monsters?
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May 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think you did a great job! I can tell that English is your second language, but honestly, even with the few mistakes I see, you're better with English than a great many native speakers!
I liked the story, and am delighted with the happy ending. The twist about the Manor not allowing a second child was original and clever - well done! Vacation time, indeed.
I liked the story, and am delighted with the happy ending. The twist about the Manor not allowing a second child was original and clever - well done! Vacation time, indeed.
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, great story!!!
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
honey you are a great writer-right up there with windynat and missfigg! your story has made me laugh and fall in love and yearn for more! you have done so well and i will truely miss this story! i also love how long the chapters are and how long the story is in general i do hope that you will write more!!! i look for more!! until the last chapter :) & :(
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March 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
In the beginning of Chapter 28, Ron says that Hermione "lied" with him; it should be "laid."
In Chapter 29, when Hermione's mother decides to go live with Hermione's aunt, the term "nephew" is used; the correct term is "niece."
Instead of "HOGWARTS SURVIVED", newspapers usually use the present tense "HOGWARTS SURVIVES." "HOGWARTS STANDS" would be more hopeful and cheering to the public.
Cute story; I like your creation of the non-canon characters and the Neville-Goyle friendship. Parvati is a wonderful villain. Draco yelling at Hemione in the hospital wing was particularly funny. I really like the Ron storyline. I hope you will mention Ron in your epilogue?
In Chapter 29, when Hermione's mother decides to go live with Hermione's aunt, the term "nephew" is used; the correct term is "niece."
Instead of "HOGWARTS SURVIVED", newspapers usually use the present tense "HOGWARTS SURVIVES." "HOGWARTS STANDS" would be more hopeful and cheering to the public.
Cute story; I like your creation of the non-canon characters and the Neville-Goyle friendship. Parvati is a wonderful villain. Draco yelling at Hemione in the hospital wing was particularly funny. I really like the Ron storyline. I hope you will mention Ron in your epilogue?
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March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg u have to update soon i wanna know what happened!!! please!!! lol