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by Aline

person Soranji
schedule August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Fast update this time. I\'m happy. Very good chapter. I love how you made us thing there was a possibility that Hermione was pregnant. I was hoping she was since there are very few Hr/D baby fics. Oh well. I can\'t wait for the next update.
person tonya
schedule August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love it so mcuh, but y did her persiod come back :( :( now i\'m sad. lol. i hlove the story. well some girls get spotting even when they\'re pregnant maybe she still is... i hope... i really hope. lol
person Anon
schedule August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m surprised more people haven\'t reviewed this story. I was dying to read an update from you actually. I was thinking about your story today. Great chapter. I can\'t wait until the next chapter.
person Anon
schedule August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yep, it\'s me again. Well done on the re-editing. I actually sat down to read all three chapters in one go. I love it. Draco\'s characterization is safely accurate to how he would feel/act/say but Hermione is slightly OOC. Not that I\'m complaining because inorder to make these two work, one of them will slightly have to be OOC. So, great job on everything and I hope to be reading more soon.

Ta-ta!
person sailormoonhannah
schedule August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OoOoOo this sounds like its going to be good!!
person Unknown
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hurry up update fast!!!!!!
person Soranji
schedule July 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have to agree with the last anon review. Your story is very good but it\'s slightly hard to know what\'s being said. I usually don\'t read stories that have the dialouge not in quotations because i end up getting confused.
person Anon
schedule July 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The plot is very good. But if you\'ve been wondering why you\'re not getting so many reviews, it\'s because people stop after they read the first paragraph of your story. Spelling/Grammar is very important and I suggest if it\'s too much for you to handle, to get a beta. Beta is a person who can look through your work and proof-read and edit. Another thing I really suggest is how you write your dialogues.

Instead of this:
- Hermione! Where have you being...? Are you allright? You look a little pale.
- I
person blood
schedule July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more please
person --
schedule July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wierd