schedule
July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is pure rubbish. Your capitolization is completely off, everyone is extremely out of character, your formatting is horrible, and there is absolutlely no sign of intelligance in this story anywhere.
My advice? Practice writing before actually posting, run your drafts through a spell checker (if your computer doesn\'t have one, try an online spellchecker), get a beta reader, and work on keeping everyone in character as opposed to morphing them into your own original creations.
~SF~
My advice? Practice writing before actually posting, run your drafts through a spell checker (if your computer doesn\'t have one, try an online spellchecker), get a beta reader, and work on keeping everyone in character as opposed to morphing them into your own original creations.
~SF~
schedule
July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2: jittery, jumbled...