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by imari

person So
schedule July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE THIS STORY IT IS JUST SOO INCREDIBLE I JUST LOVE IT AND I WOULD LIKE TO SAY UPDATE!!!!!!!!! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE PLZ UPDATE I WANT TO READ MORE AND MORE DONT STOP WRITING

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person me
schedule July 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
im confused
person Anon
schedule July 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
just a quick tip to make your ff even better,

for any sex scene, try puttin emotion into it, and senses, afte all, isn\'t sex sensual?
person justyou
schedule July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this story is way cool
schedule July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good writing, real good story to get into.
person subjunctivity
schedule July 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Details! Please, when you write something, put some details into it. It\'s also nice to start a new paragraph when a new person speaks, thereby helping the readers understand what\'s going on. And a story is generally at least 1,000 words long (though that rule can be broken), especially if more chapters will come.

I\'m sure you have wonderful ideas for your stories and a good way of expressing yourself aloud. Just, when you write it, put a little more effort into making it coherent and worthwhile to read. :-)