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hi are there any more chapter coming soon if there are any please send them to me lol I cant get enough of this story it should become novel in length, it is that wonderful and your writing style if just perfect thanks :)

I could have sworn that I logged in but oh well. A few things I have to mention. I know that you mentioned that even though you don't have a beta, you still go back and re-word things and play around with the structure. That's good, but I still think you need to do one last thing. You need to go back and reread your story. The structure is fine. The characters are fine, even the ones that you came up with. That's all fine. However, there were many many times in the story where, simple mistakes were made. Things like mixing up :there, their, they're. A spell check won't catch these. My personal favorite is "Sweater than honey". A few grammar infractions were made, where I had to reread the sentence a good three times to understand it. And lastly, you mentioned you're new to writing it, but hey practice makes perfect when it comes to writing sex scenes. Still, since the beginning of the story, you have kept building the anticipation for this moment that the two of them FINALLY get to be together. And then it was finally here. Draco lubed up, didn't even stretch Poor Harry or anything, pushed his self into Harry , and then....... they collapse into bed after coming together. Kind of a let down. THEN in your author's note, you mentioned that you don't want to get kicked off of FFN. Well here's the good news. You're on AFF. You can write the hottest, filthiest, and most romantic sex scene of your life and all the readers will demand that you write more.

Please update this story, soon, I haven't read it in awhile, but love to see new chapters :)

i love the story. please update soon.

k. in this chapter you say hildy has never been to diagon ally before but that is not true. when ron , hermione and her parents first went when harry was there hildy went along too. you said that was her first time. so you are incorrect in the chapter about that. other wise its an amazing story

no no no no i need more now update and soon please please please please i am begging I love this and all the mystery is great I just bet that gandpa devroux is alive and well and will come and help soon. more soon yes?

Angel Lain

I have just reread this story for something like the fifth time and I wasn't sure if I had ever reviewed...

This story is fabulous and I check at least once a month to see if you have updated and then, half the time, reread it to tide myself over... :)

I went to your LiveJournal recently and heard all about that idiot reviewer... It didn't sound like you were discouraged by it, only angry at how thick people, or this certain person, can be! I'm glad! Taking his/her "advice" would be a huge letdown to those of us in the fanfiction community who love your writing. I left a comment on there just so you'd know how equally frustrated, at least some! of, your readers are in regards to this idiot.(I hope you liked it, but then again I don't even know if you've seen it...)

Sorry... I don't have any suggestions or specific comments. I'm more of the 'eagerly wait and wonder' type of reader than the 'point out hopeful suggestions' type. I figure that what you've written so far is great and I'd only ruin it by adding my half assed opinions. :)

Keep up the good work!

Eagerly awaiting the next installment,

LoverofallthingsPttR

Okay, I am seriously loving this story. I was searching through stories and I am a huge fan of H/D creature fics. And this one stuck in my minds eye. So after about a week of not getting a chance to look at it, I finally sat down to read. I finished the posted chaps in a little over an hour-ish. I cannot wait until the next chapter is posted. I can't wait to see what going to happen with Voldy, and not to mention the full-bloods when they find out that H+D are offically bonded. Please continue this story, I'm so needing to have more.

Lily of Darkness

it's a fantastic story!! *__*

Great story please update really quickly.