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for The boy he didn't know

by Draconix

person NightOwl
schedule July 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Now you really HAVE TO continue :-)) Its sweet.
person AuctorRubra
schedule July 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello! I think you have something really interesting going. I can\'t wait to see how Draco decides to take the situation in hand. Also, you\'re doing very well with your writing. Your English is great. The only problem I\'ve seen is that there is a tense mix up here and there, but that\'s easy to get around. Can\'t wait to read the next update!
person Dezra
schedule July 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Harry, LOOK at Draco, dammit. Good story, bytheway.
person PadfootLivesOn
schedule July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well I liked it! It would be a great One-shot. But I think you should go on with it. I think it has high hopes to become a good story. You english is fine by the way. I didn\'t really see anything wrong with it until you pointed it out. You could always get a beta to help you with your grammer, trust me they really do help. So I really hope to see a next chapter. If not it was great!!

Cheer,
Pamela
person Narcissa Black
schedule July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s definitely worth it, you should keep going. You already have them getting close to each other. I did notice that English was a SL for you, I\'ve read a lot of stories from native English speakers who made more mistakes. Sometimes from the cadence I can tell what the first language is, but this was too short. LOL.
person Clalyan
schedule July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I knew you do this someday the padawan has overcome the master ... what a great piece of art... but we\'re still
person Akusaa
schedule June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is really good! You should continue it, I\'d love to know what happens in Hogwarts!
person morgie
schedule June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i loved it keep up the good work
person NightOwl
schedule June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice piece, I enjoyed it much. It could be \"one-shot\", it could be start of longer story.
Im not a person to judge your English (in fact I read but almost not speak English - so I apologize for my poor language here) but I understood your text well :-).
Good luck with more writing!
person zentiis
schedule June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
loved it! ^_^ .......sequel?