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for Black Heart

by Qmouse

person linz
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this story is is awesome you gotta continue!!!
person Charlotte
schedule July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story! Please keep going and update often! I love it!!
schedule July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a story! I would like to read more of this just to find out why Snape was in such bad shape on his return to Hogwarts. And...I\'d like to know just what Lucius was talking about, the sly devil.

Anywho, carry on!
person Shadowknight
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad at all for a first outing, so to speak. I\'ve seen much, much worse from people on affn. Not in the HP stories though. I\'ve seen the better fic authors writing HP fics more than anywhere else on affn. Keep up the good flow of the plot. Not much in the way of spelling/grammar errors, but for a slight misuse of \'to\' when it should have been \'too\' (think \'also\' when using too).
person EsmaKeltin
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is great, very entertaining and sweet. My only suggestion is to have it more thoroughly edited for grammar... but otherwise it is lovely. And I very much look forward to reading more! :):)
person Moi
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More, please! Keep it coming!
person firewall
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hope you continue with your story. I\'ve enjoyed reading the two chapters you\'ve written thus far. Your characters have a nice blend between canon and originality. Keep going, please.
person alexia
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awsome chapter! Can\'t wait for the smutt lol
person Jon
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
An extremely well-crafted story. Looking forward to the next chapter!
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m enjoying this very much. I can\'t wait to see what happens next!