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XP :falls over laughing: go over reaction. loved snape in that. ^_^

more? onegai? :chibi eyes:

:thumbs up:

Great story, but this latest chapter seems to have some major errors. Firstly, since Hogwarts is a castle, there wouldn\'t be any plaster in the ceiling of Dumbledore\'s office. His office is made of stone like the rest of the castle unless you describe it as otherwise (which you didn\'t, so I can only assume you forgot where this was taking place). And did I miss something at the end there? I was rather tired by then, but I didn\'t see the transition from the Great Hall to the dungeons when Dean was going to ask Harry out. If they were in the dungeons, then how and when and why did Dumbledore follow everyone down there? If they were in the Great Hall, then why did it seem as if they were just outside the Potions class? Well, aside from that, it\'s doing really well. I particularly love the submissive Harry and possessive Snape. Update soon!

The timing, the cadence, of the story feels a bit off, rushed.

Now, my comments on the conniving note-taking headmaster called Albus (who should be busted!) who gets into everybody\'s business!
He is _damn cruel_!!!! I was waiting for Severus to bite...In fact, I was cheering for it!!!

Nope, nothing wrong with Harry snuggling into Severus\' robes, no, nothing at all! The protection, the yearning, the want and desire all came through rather nicely.

Now, to clarify, yes, we all want sex, but here, smut will definately do. It all depends on what \'em-PHAS-is\' you put on what \'syl-LA-ble\', so to speak. lol

O.k., can Dumbledore really hold back Severus when he\'s at full strength. That could be a show.

Loved it, but I read through it toooo fast, so you must try and make it longer. The part about Neville was funny, \'thought you were going to hit him\' lmao! What a great coverup!!!

as always, please post soon

I\'d think, since Hermione already knows about both Snape and Harry, Sev\'d ask her for her help. Maybe that\'s just me. Plus, that way, she could help keep \"poachers\" away. oh, and by the way, I burnt dinner dancing around singing \"Dumbledore got his, cause he\'s an idiot\". So now I\'m eating Wendy\'s, which is better, anyway. Cause this update rocked and I can\'t wait for more!!

Looks good to me! Write on!

I think the way snape is so agressive to dumbeldore is little ooc....one of sanpes storngest ties is to dumbeldore, he will never hurt him. call him manipiulative, yes, but crushing him to the wall over such a thing, and the way he speaks-not.... but this is the only bad thing I can find yet^^ good writing. original idea, this makes it one of my favorite snarrys.....sorry for the spelling...english is not my native.

ahhhhhh, thanks for the headache potion, much better now!!!! The only thing I saw wrong with this chapter was that it wasn\'t long enough. *smirk*
For some reason this statement from Snape made me want to smirk.

Ooh! I can\'t wait for the next chapter! I am in love with this story!!!

I love this fic. Sev\'s reactions are too funny (\"I thought you were going to hit him\" indeed!) and Harry is so sweet. I can\'t wait to see them in their mandatory potions sessions this week! Update soon.