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October 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update great story!
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October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update soon! please please please !!!
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October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow amazing story it really is, its been like that for a while have you stopped writing it if not cant wait for you to update
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August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s looking pretty good, very well developed and the grammer mistakes aren\'t very many. Good work, keep it up!
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August 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I can just hear the music in the background, like in the Saturday morning comics on t.v., \"Dun, Dun, Dun, daaaa\"
I\'m sorry if you didn\'t write it this way, but it screams of \"Holy Schmole ---\" and \"Take THAT you Bastard\" type of retoric.
The idea of the story is unusual in that we\'ve been given no background to base what may be going on or the hopes we may have. Hopefully, the next chapters will give us this. You\'ve given us some idea in that this is taking place in Snape Mansion and Snape has some control, but stopped short of what that may entail. If Snape is to \'break\' Harry, it could mean an option for our \'hero\'.
I like the idea of Remus struggling against his affliction and facing a losing battle because of sleep is one I haven\'t seen before. Is this because of the full moon or the drug/poison that was injected into him. Will the antidote reverse this? I hope so.
I realize I\'m being quite blunt with my review, but hope that you\'ll continue with the story and develop it more fully, as it so deserves.
Please, keep posting.
I\'m sorry if you didn\'t write it this way, but it screams of \"Holy Schmole ---\" and \"Take THAT you Bastard\" type of retoric.
The idea of the story is unusual in that we\'ve been given no background to base what may be going on or the hopes we may have. Hopefully, the next chapters will give us this. You\'ve given us some idea in that this is taking place in Snape Mansion and Snape has some control, but stopped short of what that may entail. If Snape is to \'break\' Harry, it could mean an option for our \'hero\'.
I like the idea of Remus struggling against his affliction and facing a losing battle because of sleep is one I haven\'t seen before. Is this because of the full moon or the drug/poison that was injected into him. Will the antidote reverse this? I hope so.
I realize I\'m being quite blunt with my review, but hope that you\'ll continue with the story and develop it more fully, as it so deserves.
Please, keep posting.
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July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
write more?
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it very much. :D Very interesting.
Is this going to be a dark fic or? is SEv really evil or is he just pretending?
A very curious Kat Potter
Is this going to be a dark fic or? is SEv really evil or is he just pretending?
A very curious Kat Potter
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice start. I like the angle you\'re trying to portray.
Yes, you need a Beta, sorry to say. I would be willing to re-read your work if you can\'t find anyone else, as I\'ve never Beta\'d before. You can reach me at the above e-mail.
What kind of poison did Severus give to Remus? You could explain it\'s effects for more angst to the story. Just a suggestion, not a flame.
Please post soon, I can\'t wait.
Yes, you need a Beta, sorry to say. I would be willing to re-read your work if you can\'t find anyone else, as I\'ve never Beta\'d before. You can reach me at the above e-mail.
What kind of poison did Severus give to Remus? You could explain it\'s effects for more angst to the story. Just a suggestion, not a flame.
Please post soon, I can\'t wait.
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start. I look forward to reading where you take this!
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June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH OH OH.... update this one now..... i\'ve got to find out the plans...... *giggle* got to love bad snape... :)