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for Deep Down and Dirty Thoughts . . .

by Severuslave

schedule June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chapter! It was great! As for the Detention story, yes, please continue it!

Tiffany
person Katie K
schedule June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes, yes! Continue! Continue! Pppllleeeaaassseee continue!
person Mary 22
schedule June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhhhh I love this!!!! Are you going to continue this oh I hope you do! ;)
schedule June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YESSSS!!! WRITE A DETENTION STORY!!!

Please? :D
person lydia
schedule June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please continue. it would be interesting to see how far they are willing to take this.
person ancientgirl
schedule June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hang on! Complete? No you can\'t be serious. Please give us at least detention.
person Ailo
schedule June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I definitely think you should continue this story. It seems unfinished as it is, and I want to know what happens at detention, although I can make a fair guess... lol

~Ailo
person Sandra
schedule June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Continue HERE! I\'m waiting!
person Villy
schedule June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'d say continue. *nods*
person anyah_daoc
schedule June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oohhhh...very naughty, which makes it very nice for us, the readers. As much as I would love to see what happens in detention, the way the story is written seems complete in itself. It would be almost anticlimatic. Of course, maybe if you used this same writing style for an epilogue...say many years later, but leave it open for interpretation by the reader until you inform through dialogue that it is several years later and not just the next day...perhaps married or in lecture, or in the great hall during the sorting...rofl wouldn\'t that be hilarious. Thank you for a wonderful piece.