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Glad you enjoyed it, Melantha. Thanks for taking the time to review.

Thanks Ridge. My own frustration at not being able to find many non-slash trio fics was what impelled me to write this one.

That was a great story. I was glad to find a trio fic with no slash involved. Very refreshing.

(I hope this hasn\'t sent twice, but my computer had a nervous breakdown...)

Anyway, I thought that this story was very good! I felt sorry for poor Harry, but it was alright in the end... *smile*

Great work!

Angeldust, the third person speech is Hermione engaging in a bit of roleplaying. Much like a stewardess or tour guide. She is deliberately speaking in an overly formal manner to try and get the boys into the spirit of the moment and it also helps her feel in control of the situation. She very much wants things to go well and this is a way of not letting the nervousness they are all feeling take over.
As for the thoughts, I personally find it irritating sometimes when an author has a character do something without it being clear how the character arrived at their decision for their actions. I like trying to get into the characters minds and it\'s something I tend to do often in my stories. I find that spending too much time describing the physical makes the sex scenes seem mechanical to me. Different strokes for different folks.
I politely reccommend that you avoid any other stories I\'ve written as the things you don\'t like (except for the third person thing) are common to my way of writing and show up to some degree in all of my stories.

this story wasnt bad, and i thought it was quite interesting actually, but there are a few problems first of all: hermione talking in third person. whats up with that? it just doesnt sound like her you know? and i think its pretty stupid. next: thoughts, you put too many thoughts, and you put wether they are thinking about any litle thing, you should put less of those and fix urself on decribing thier actions more because that leads me to the third problem: the characters seem to sound mechanical sometimes, and the smut needs a bit working on.

i love this story, after all i love trio fics lol this story was good i liked it, exept for hermione talking in third person sometimes, but other than that it was great! you should keep going with this and see where it leads to!

Good story, and worth the long read. I love the dialog, keep up the awesome work.

SignedAngel.

Great. I know people like the trio with others (I am guilty as well), but there\'s something so satisfying about them together. Harry. Yep, if I had to choose, it wouldn\'t be difficult.