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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok... its a bit more than grammer and writing technique... its rushed.. quite a bit too...- i suggest u make the chapters longer and more detailed.. it ruins the fun if you dont write with detail and patience. the plot was quite intresting and it was pretty much the only thing that kept me reading. i suggest you go back and make it interesting. it will be absolutely PERFECT if you do. best wishes-
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely LOVE this story!!! I am very glad it\'s not going to be a threesome with Lucius. I like just Harry and Draco together. Post soon!!
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Could you clarify something? First time Harry uses Fae glamor and looks like Snape, Draco deosn\'t even notice that Harry changed. A few line later however, he confirmend that Harry took the glamor off. So how does Draco see/sense the glamor exactly? Is it just transparent and he always sees Elf/Fae Harry, or does he notice the glamor in some way? If he notices, then how exactly does it look to him?
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow great update... Herm\' is sooo cute LOl :D
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m sad that Harry doesn\'t have an Anamagus form, but I liked the trick with the owls. I am glad that he\'s not a predatory cat or a snake, though. That\'s slightly played, while still totally cool (obviously) Thanks for the update, and I can\'t wait until you update again!! And I love the redundancy of Ron!!
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 20 review: I guess this is more a formatting pointer. The paragraphs would be more readable if
there were a space between them; I found myself rereading paragraphs because the lines ran together.
there were a space between them; I found myself rereading paragraphs because the lines ran together.
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like these type of stories, but....(there\'s always a \"but\", isn\'t there?) I find it VERY boring that every one of them has to have Harry develop wings!! Come on now. The story line would work out just as well without them and be more believeable. It\'s just that almost every story about Harry\'s Inheritance has him sprouting wings. Can someone direct me to a good story without the \"wing thing\"?
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love the owls as revenge!!! Bigots, especially jealous bigots deserve the most pranks of all...
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June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thanks so much for updating! This story totally rocks and I just can\'t wait for more!
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June 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for updating so quickly! I just love this fic, and can\'t wait for the next update!