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Great chapter! I\'m glad you finally updated! I can\'t wait to read more. Update soon!

Tiffany

Thanks for updating this. I thought you had abandoned us. I\'m looking forward to more.

Hmmmm, you say you want this to be short but I see this getting away from you a bit. You have such a nice slow build up going I am hoping you will stretch this out to be at least ten chapters. You know I love your stories so I\'ll keep reading.

Loving it so far, can not wait to see where this goes. Update again soon.

Iteresting premise and I will continue to read it through. Please get a beta. You have numerous grammar mistakes. Review proper use of creating possessives; for most the apostrophe comes before the s ie Hermione\'s hand-you continuously put it after the s which is only correct if the word is already plural or naturally ends with an s ie Severus\'. You also need to review punctuation and capitalization rules for speech in quotes; the part with the person\'s name and how they said something is usually not capitalized ie. \"Yes,\" she said. Notice the she said is not capitalized as it is not by itself a sentence in this case and it is set off by a preceding comma. I don\'t know if it is due to the often wonky formatting of AFF, but I noticed in chap 1 that just about every sentence is formatted as a separate paragraph when many should be combined into a cohesive paragraph. Keep up the story.

I REALLY like your story. It is well-written and holds my interest. I thought I saw you say it might be longer than you first intended? YAY! I hope so, it\'s worth the read. :)

This is briliant!!!

I hope you update soon!!!

I love how Crookshanks loves Severus... brilliant!!!

i\'m not going to lie to you.... i LOVE this fanfic. I really hope you update soon and fast because it looks like it\'s going somewhere really good.

I\'m really enjoying this story. Snape seems to be verbalizing his kindness without going OOC. More please.

It\'s quite good. Please continue soon!