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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It sounds good so far. Do you need a betareader? Because I\'ll do it for you. Not to mention that would get me the chapters sooner. ^_^
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
neko: WTF Is wrong with Draco i dont know but thats okay that whats the story is for riight?
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s a VERY good begining.
And it\'s daring, because many writers threaten with giving Draco to Voldy, but most avoid it. So, making it reality and dealing with it is good.
I also like the way Draco treats the situation - with both pain and some strenght of will. And how he didn\'t fight/found a way to fight being given away, and how he is trying to stay strong in his predicament... Really good. Very well writen diary entries, you provoke a good gut reaction.
Now I wonder how Harry will procede and respond. There is such a contrast right now between their situations... Maybe Harry could tell Draco about some fun stuff, once in a while, so that Draco remembers that there is something outside of his suffering?
Please update soon - I want to read Harry\'s responce.
P.S.: If Harry were a bisexual, where would Molly put him... ? :-) Oh, and you seem to be daring to let Harry have fun with gender roles (Hermione\'s clothes...) - that\'s cool! :-)
And it\'s daring, because many writers threaten with giving Draco to Voldy, but most avoid it. So, making it reality and dealing with it is good.
I also like the way Draco treats the situation - with both pain and some strenght of will. And how he didn\'t fight/found a way to fight being given away, and how he is trying to stay strong in his predicament... Really good. Very well writen diary entries, you provoke a good gut reaction.
Now I wonder how Harry will procede and respond. There is such a contrast right now between their situations... Maybe Harry could tell Draco about some fun stuff, once in a while, so that Draco remembers that there is something outside of his suffering?
Please update soon - I want to read Harry\'s responce.
P.S.: If Harry were a bisexual, where would Molly put him... ? :-) Oh, and you seem to be daring to let Harry have fun with gender roles (Hermione\'s clothes...) - that\'s cool! :-)
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A very good beginning. I don\'t mean to be rude, but does your computer have spell check? I noticed some mistakes with that. I\'d be glad to beta for you if you need one. I do like the story itself, so please update soon. :)
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ducks...proofread for yourself. Self-editing isn\'t a chore; we all have to do it. You\'ve got a good basis here...You caught my interest. Now, build on it with just a bit more editing/spell-checking, and you\'ll be scot-free!!!
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Did Draco send him the journal? And if he didn\'t does he know Harry has the other one? Why hasn\'t Harry written back? Can\'t wait for chapter 2!
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have a few questions, but that\'s to be expected when I\'ve only read one chapter. Hopefully some of them will be explained soon. The most pressing question is--does Draco KNOW that Harry can read his diary? Otherwise, I really like this story, so please don\'t feed me (or my review *perish the thought*) to the monkeys!! And here I thought I had the only domesticated flock in the US...