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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more more more!!!!!! hehehe
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hated this story when it was first done..why exactly was it done a second time?? It\'s badly written. The characters are badly developed, and shallow. Your harry is irritating. The Harry Potter as a Virgin Bottom stories are bad enough and common enough that it gets boring. Why is it that everyone must write Harry off as a bottom? Aren\'t there enough of those laying around? Haven\'t you ever read the fanfiction written by Seeker? Now Seeker is the best slash writter in Harry Potter Fanfiction. Maybe you should read a few to know what a great is like, what originality is like. Then maybe just maybe you could develop your smut scenes. And get out of the dump everyone is in that writes stories where Snape is a top rather then the rare bottom Snape.
That\'s all the constructive critism i can give you at the moment. I would say \"no offense\" but i have the feeling you will not take that as truth.
That\'s all the constructive critism i can give you at the moment. I would say \"no offense\" but i have the feeling you will not take that as truth.
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good luck, Harry! Snapes just going to have to get over his fainting.
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June 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved it. Please continue to write more of it. Loved the song in it too.
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved the original one I hope this ones just as good! please write more!
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH, the second time is just as great. Love this story. Ingenius invention this closet.
Hmmm, plot bunny....Seeing how Harry was a virgin and Severus took that virginity, I\'m imagining that they will try this again, the proper way, without the pain (OUCH! just hurts to think about it), either that or another venue(s) will be found to do this again. Both were panting with arousal, so I\'m thinking that they really enjoy each other, even though outwardly they put up a front. I\'m not sure if MPREG comes into this, as powerful magic and/or a special potion is ususally necessary, but then again....maybe.....????
At any rate, Harry and Severus would have a secret to share and that would bring them closer together, as much as they dare.
Too obvious???? Let\'s see.....
Hmmm, plot bunny....Seeing how Harry was a virgin and Severus took that virginity, I\'m imagining that they will try this again, the proper way, without the pain (OUCH! just hurts to think about it), either that or another venue(s) will be found to do this again. Both were panting with arousal, so I\'m thinking that they really enjoy each other, even though outwardly they put up a front. I\'m not sure if MPREG comes into this, as powerful magic and/or a special potion is ususally necessary, but then again....maybe.....????
At any rate, Harry and Severus would have a secret to share and that would bring them closer together, as much as they dare.
Too obvious???? Let\'s see.....
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dear Writer,
You absolutely MUST update this story. As it is posted now, it IS on AFFN, unless I am confused as to where I am. Please update! Delightful premise, to be sure.
You absolutely MUST update this story. As it is posted now, it IS on AFFN, unless I am confused as to where I am. Please update! Delightful premise, to be sure.
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good story
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Amusing! I love it. Professor Snape seemed not be very cold in this archive, but Harry is vivid.Really looking forward to future chapters.!
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep posting, this story has the potential to be great, funny and hot. I can\'t wait to read the next update