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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the orgasm waaas a bit short
You really have to slow it down. Screaming is always good, if not, muffled screaming, biting down on eachothers shoulder so no one hears. Arching backs, tightening muscles, final, desperate twitching/thrusting, all that stuff- spots inf ront of eyes, vision going blank, throwing heads back.
generally, post orgasm, you have to leave them a moment to pant/relax, chill out/ fall against eachother. And pulling out should probably elicit some reaction from the bottom guy.
does that help?
Other than that, it\'s pretty fun ^__^
DRACO MUST BE BOTTOM.
The end
You really have to slow it down. Screaming is always good, if not, muffled screaming, biting down on eachothers shoulder so no one hears. Arching backs, tightening muscles, final, desperate twitching/thrusting, all that stuff- spots inf ront of eyes, vision going blank, throwing heads back.
generally, post orgasm, you have to leave them a moment to pant/relax, chill out/ fall against eachother. And pulling out should probably elicit some reaction from the bottom guy.
does that help?
Other than that, it\'s pretty fun ^__^
DRACO MUST BE BOTTOM.
The end
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad. good descriptions and great for a pointless smut fic. Just one thing...in the beginning you said that it was past curfew, but at the end, when Draco left, all the sudden he has to go to class with other students. That was one looooooooong fuck if that be the case. Otherwise, just what I needed for my day.