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one word WOW!!!!!!!!! That was soooo hot damn I say you definetly passed in my books

You actually doubt that you can write a sex scene?! Oh My God! That was SO hot! You\'d better include that!

This was really good, I would never have guessed it was your first sex scene. I can\'t wait to read your story!

that was so...HOT!! i deffinitly think you should right the sex scenes i will read and review every single chapter of your story when you post it good gods you have exstreme talent with sex scenes!!!
Your Perverted Fan,
Kitty N

Very nice! Well written, enticing, sexual, emotional, all the things you want in a good sex scene. I would love to see the story that goes along with this especially if the sex scenes are ths long the the chapters should be really long and I love it when writers put that much effort in to their stories, instead of posting twenty lines and calling it a chapter. Also please update often instead of every now and then it is very annoying when that happens. Let me know when you post it my email is at the top. Thanks!

personally, i think this was a pretty good scene. some problems i noticed, though, was with some of the imagery, like where you said something about draco having \'diamond hair\'. that doesn\'t quite make sense, since you don\'t mention if it was the color of diamonds or if it was as hard as diamonds, and it can\'t be the second because draco\'s supposed to have the best hair. and some parts you have some abrupt shifts, like where you have harry mention that draco looks different from him, but you don\'t describe his penis; or where you have draco tell him to \'pull it back\', but don\'t actually say that he has a foreskin; and where you have harry touching his anus and then squeezing his penis, but don\'t say that he reached down to do this, so one could think that he\'d been holding it the entire time.

still think this was a great scene, just needs some fine turning. cant wait to read your novel, and post again soon sometime.

Oh! Wow! What can I say? You sure can write a sex scene.

I definately believe that you can write sex scenes! It was hot and tasteful at the same time.

oh. my. lord. that was SO HOT! i CAN NOT WAIT until your full length ficcy comes out, i am SO looking forwards to it! *squeal* oh, that made me happy, i havent read any REALLY good h/d smut in a while. when you post up your story could you say, \"hey this is that story with that sex scene in it\"or something of that sort? cause if ya dont i\'ll totally forget about this. hope to see your story come up soon, nikki

can you write sex??? Damn stright you can!!!! that was amazing!!!!!! seriously you did a good job and if i were you i\'d put it in your other story because it is most deffently worth other people reading!!!!!!!!keep up the great work!!!