rate_review Reviews

good god!

are you seriously unaware of how amazing you write this sort of stuff!

i loved it! the scene was beautifully portrayed, well detailed, not cheesy or over-the-top, nice dialogue and suggested dialogue. i'm sure there are other parts to this little PWP that i could go on and on about, but as i have no criticisms that would just be rather pointless (considering your pursuit in regards to bettering your smut writing ability... is that even possible?!)

and i also wanted to add that i totally loved the way that harry and draco were together. your portrayal of their relationship (as far as a one-shot can portray it), the way the two interacted and the just overall tenderness and yumminess of the scene definitely caught my attention.

i look forward to seeing more of this type of story...

LoverofallthingsPttR

*smokes a cigarette* Damn.

+claps+ I like it! So much better than the last time! More like what might REALLY happen. The dialogue was great!

Ciao!!

Oh my god! This one is even better. The increased dialogue really did it, it makes it so much more *real*, if you can say that. I also liked the fact that it made it more clear that Draco had at least some experience from before whereas Harry was a virgin. I think the sex scene is extremely well written, I\'ve read some horrible ones in the past, and I look forward to reading your complete story.

Yeah, you\'re pretty good at writing sex scenes. Why all the facination with Dracos foreskin though? Seemed kinda pointless.

Holy moly! Even hotter then the first time! I say you\'ve got it down pact!

Pretty good- the sex itself is great. But I\'m assuming this is fitting into your story, and that Harry is a virgin and Draco is
more... experienced? If so, I don\'t see Harry acting very much like this is his first time, except for at the beginning. Also,
Draco\'s experience wavers in and out as far as the reader can assume. I can\'t wait to read the full length story.

wow. when i read this the first time it was a really good sex scene, especially for your first time. now it\'s one of the best ones i have ever read. bravo!

I don\'t know if you\'ve ever had sex before, but I\'ve never experienced the whole \"lights sparking behind my eyes\" phenomenon or the \"feeling like I was made of fire that was, in turn, made of ice,\" thing.
Maybe I\'m just doing it wrong, though...

You can *definately* do sex scenes.
It was one of the best ones I\'ve read.
Now, just post that story you talked about... :-)
We\'ll be waiting to read it.