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What is the matter with Ron? Does He really wants Harry to accept and move on?

Where is Ginny? Was it mentioned? I forgot, I

love the angst. you have to update again soon i love it. this is the best chaptrer yet.

Very intresting. But what I would like to know is, is Harry and Snape ever going to find love with each other? Or will they both just dwindle away? Keep writing. I'd like to know more...

U updated!!!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Oooh, poor,poor...everyone(except Snape.)

I can understand all parties in this case, but I do hope Harry and Ron and Hermione become friends again...Harry could use their help, Hermione is smart, Ron is loyal and ooh, don't foret Draco, he's powerful and drvious...*smirks*

While I appreciate Ron's realization that Harry has reached a dangerous level of depression, rage, and loss of control, I don't like what he said about Harry sulking. I mean, what exactly does he want Harry to do? Harry's done the screaming and the crying. No one was listening. He's done the fighting and struggling in every way, legal and personal, that he could and, as he's already pointed out, none of it did any good. What does Ron want him to do? Run through the halls screaming? Throw a fit every five minutes? Of course everything's not all right, but what does he think Harry can do about it now? And it's not like he's been full of any helpful suggestions.
I'm also very confused about Harry's "wicked smiles" and "howling laughter." Everything else about his reactions seems spot on, but that's not. When it was suggested that he'd gone consciously evil, was leaning toward Voldemort, he cracked. So what's the rest of that about?
Glad to see Snape is finally being forced to face some of the damage he's done. Don't let up on him.

Oh thank you, thank you. When Harry was laughing inside while Snape was crying did my poor heart good.

I don't know. Your themes are great and I get what you're trying to do, but it just doesn't all gel together. It's a little TOO enigmatic. I think you're going for mystery, but I'm just getting tired of plowing through veiled references, hints, innuendos that never seem to lead anywhere. There isn't enough concrete plot to warrant 26 chapters for me.

I like the mystery, I'd just enjoy some of the loose ends coming together sooner rather than later. At some point, too much mystery just starts to seem contrived and a bit pretentious, like you are clearly trying to be sneaky.

Love your writing style, over all, I just think it could be strengthened if you firmed up the plotline a bit.

i dont think i will be continuing to read this likes, i dont like the way you have harry and making Snape look like a sap! its pathetic! but the story really is good tho

Poor Harry!!! This chapter is really sad, although i do give him ten points for making snape cry, the bastard that he is deserved that. Harry really is dying isn't he? Please let this have a happy ending. I love this story and you are a brilliant author.