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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear. I\'m dying to find out what happens next! Poor Harry and Ron, it\'ll make so little sense to them when the boys arrive and begin their battle! Heh!
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
your story is going wonderful On the part where you said he did not Wanted to be there and so on you should change wanted to want this is not a flam so please dont take it as one I just wanted you to know.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
On your mark. Get set. Go! OMG. I just love this first chapter. And to think the Slytherins are after Harry. Anyway, I can\'t wait for your follow-up.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I need more damn it. More I say. Anyway, excellent chapter.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whoa!!! This is so good and so hot!! More more more!! this is different from most other Veela Draco fiction,and I like the direction you are taking. Please update soon!!
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This sounds extremely provocative. I would, though, recommend a Beta to polish up the rough spots (commas before the end-quotation mark in dialogue, parallelism, syntactical clarity, etc.) and would be more than willing to offer my services. Leave an email if you
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love sub! Harry stories and this one really seems to have a lot of potential, I can\'t wait to see where you take it. I like how you set the story up and handled it so far. can\'t wait to read the next update.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Best line:
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
\"Really he knew all too well, but THRUST Snape to come up with a detention on a day off\" - you actually wrote that. Looks like someone has smut on the brain... not that I\'d expect anything less from aff.net writers.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww, I was hoping for a bit more resistance! Like...he could hide under the Whomping Willow, or in the Chamber of Secrets...or release a whole bunch of Bludgers. I still like the story, and the plotline a lot, though.